I was sleeping in my bed when the earthquake began, I left my room and I was cuddle with my mom. The floor was moving very strong, I could hardly stand up, the movement was accompanied by a horrible sound, was endless!!!!
My neighbors were scared, someone were crying, others were nervous, but we were all worried, we tried to call our loved ones, but we could not communicate with anyone. My mom couldn't call his family, they were in Constitution.
We spent two days without power, but never we ran out of water. When we could watch the news we were in shock.
The weeks following the earthquake with my family went to constitution, and see in person the disaster is more shocking.
Maka
Hi Maka... I thing that for you and your family had an horrible experience, you couldn´t communicate with your family that were in Constitution!!! I can imagine that it is terrible don´t know what happens with them. I hope they were ok.
ResponderEliminarA hug!
hello,
ResponderEliminarThe worst thing when happen a catastrophe is to konw nathing of are family.
I really hope that your family are good for now.
I see you
bye
Very good, Maca.
ResponderEliminarSome problems with subject verb agreement, though.
Have your work proofread by a classmate for feedback.
2 points.
Paula
Hi! How you could see my English ís very bad, I dont have the knowledges I need for to correct your post...but I`ll do I can.
ResponderEliminarThe Earthquake:
1. The sentence "I was cuddle with my mom", I can be wrong, but maybe could be "I cuddle to my mom"
2. Other sentence is: "but never we ran out of water" maybe to put the subject first is better: "but we never ran out ..."
3. When you say "the weeks following", I think the correct way is: the following weeks. Or: the weeks after the earthquake.
4. And in the same sentence you omitted the subject: "the weeks following the earthquake (I) with my family..."
5. The same in the following sentence:"...constitution, and (we could)see..."
In short: your problem is in the subjects!!
:D
See you!!
..and nice to meet you!